could not sleep a wink
had a date with her last night
she, who said “dream on”
when I asked her out with me
I dreamed, but she was not there
Unclogging my mind…
could not sleep a wink
had a date with her last night
she, who said “dream on”
when I asked her out with me
I dreamed, but she was not there
nicely composed
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Thanks !!!
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Nicely done indeed. Glad I found your blog. I don’t generally do a LOT of haiku/senryu//tanka, but that’s my plan for April’s NaPoWriMo. I posted my intentions here: https://rlavalette.wordpress.com/2017/03/11/maybe-in-april/
You also might enjoy trying your hand at sevenlings, a form that suits your particular voice well, I think. If you’re not familiar with the form you can google it. I enjoy them when I’m working form. Here’s one at Scrambled, Not Fried: https://rlavalette.wordpress.com/2015/07/13/a-sevenling/
Cheers, Dude! Keep up the good work.
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Hey Ron ! Thanks for following… Will try to explore sevenlings…
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