Past imperfect, future tense

I am afraid of
looking back in the past it
reminds me of you
so I look to the future
but it scares without you

Colleenโ€™s Weekly #Poetry Challenge # 35 โ€“ PAST & FUTURE

5 thoughts on “Past imperfect, future tense

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  1. Big grin for the subtle humor in the title. ๐Ÿ˜€

    A small point, if I may. Looks like U are not obsessive about syllable counts, as the last line has 6 rather than 7. Good. But having “it” end line 2 (rather than start line 3) looks like a contortion to get counts of 7 and 5 (rather than 6 and 6) in those lines. Tho I do advocate reasonable effort toward preferred syllable counts in haiku/tanka, I would be happier with a smoothly flowing 5-6-6-7-6 than the present 5-7-5-7-6.

    Hmmm. Putting “me” after “scares” would make line 5 have 7 syllables and (more importantly!) balance the “me” in line 3. That would leave it with 5-6-6-7-7, so close to the preferred syllable counts that only churls would quibble.

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